IELTS Writting. The Factors of news broadcast

News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news, and would it be better if more good news was reported?

 News editors decide what to report to audience and readers through the media and diverse factors have effect on these decisions. And I suppose that we are living in the so much bad news which can give negative effects on our life and I strongly believe that it is necessary to report more good news for our better life.

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 It is true that news editors have to make a difficult decision about which news stories they broadcast or publish, and there are diverse factors that affect these decisions. And I suppose that we are living in a world that focuses so much on bad news which can give negative effects in our lives and I strongly believe that it is necessary to report more good news.

 There are a lot of factors of choosing the news such as controversial problems in our society, significant political events, information about international current affairs and the like. Away from those factors, I believe that interest, what kinds of news can attract people, is ultimate element of picking the news. In order to increase their readership and the ratings, news editors broadcast the sensational and infotainment news and tabloid.

 Another important factor is a guidance of owner, government or major companies which support the new broadcast or newspapers as advertisers. They have a strong power about the media, so they can have effect on the news. So some editors demand a number of amendments to the writers’ articles and they try to cover up what owner, government or advertisers don’t want to broadcast or print about.

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 There are a lot of factors in choosing the news to broadcast such as controversial problems in our society, significant political events, information about international current affairs and the like. Away from those factors, I believe that public interest, which is the kind of news that attracts people's attention, is the ultimate element in picking the news. In order to increase their readership and the ratings, news editors broadcast the sensational and infotainment news and tabloid.

 Another important factor is the pressure that editors get from the owners who employ them, the government, or major companies which support the news broadcast or newspapers as advertisers. They have a strong influence to the media, so some editors demand a number of amendments to the writers’ articles and they try to cover up what the owner, government, or advertisers don’t want to broadcast or print about.

Nowadays we can easily encounter a lot of sensational and bad news such as crime, suicide, and disasters because those kinds of news intensively attract the people. Because of this reason, we are exposed to lots of bad news and our lives are filled with negative and depressed energy. Otherwise if we usually hear and see heart-warming and feel-good news such as charity, volunteers and overcome a hardship stories, I definitely believe that our lifes are going to a positive way and we will live in a better society. So I wish that the more good news will be reported for positivity.

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Nowadays, it seems to me that people become accustomed to negative news. We are easily exposed to a lot of stories about war, crime, suicide, and disasters. Because of this reason, our lives are filled with negativity and this desensitizes people making them more skeptical about being able to make a change. Otherwise, if we usually hear and see heart-warming and feel-good news such as charity works, volunteerism and stories about overcoming hardships, I definitely believe that our lives are going to more positive and we will live in a better society. So I wish that more good news will be reported to give more inspiration to people on a daily basis.

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IELTS Speaking Part 2. Describe a situation when you tried to speak using another language to communicate for the first time?

IELTS Speaking Part 2. Describe a situation when you tried to speak using another language to communicate for the first time?

- What was the situation?
- Where did it happen?
- When did this happen?
- What was the outcome?

Just last year i had a connecting flight from Nepal to China and i was on my way home to Korea. When we were about to board our flight to Korea, the Chinese staff asked for our tickets in English. At that time we found that we dropped our tickets in the air plane from Nepal, so we explained our situation in English too. Butt here was language barrier between us. 

During that time. suddenly he pointed at me and told me that(=he said that) I have to learn English more aside from that he told his Chinese coworkers that my friends and I couldn't speak English very well. I could hear what they said and I felt really bad and insulted.

Anyway we were(could X) able to log in the system and boarded the plane to Korea. Because of this happening I promised my self do learn English even more. I don't want to be insulted anymore. That instance was not very good experience for me

IELTS Writting. Students' bad behavior in schools (causes&solutions)

Introduction)

Nowadays, there are some problems about students’ bad behavior in school. There are a variety of reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle this issue.

 Main 1) 

Students’ bad attitude can come from the lack of home education. If parent are too busy to monitor and control their children or they are too lenient for their kids’ bad actions, they can be lacking in judgment between rights and wrongs thus, students tend to don’t accept or follow their parents and the school’s rules and regulations.

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Students’ bad attitude can come from the lack of guidance from their parents or relatives. If parents are too busy to monitor and control their children, or they are too lenient with their kids’ bad actions, children can lack judgment between right and wrong. Thus, students tend to be rebellious and not accept or follow their parents and the school’s rules and regulations.

Another cause is that teachers are not good at guiding their students’ poor behavior. Even though they have a great teaching skill about their subject, sometimes they are not used to handle students’ bad attitude and it is hard to pay attention to every students. So when there are some problems with their students, they can’t treat that issue well and some students try to seek for attention through violence.

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Another cause is that teachers are not good at guiding their students’ poor behavior. Even though they have a great teaching skill, sometimes they are not very good when it comes to classroom management and handling each of their students. So when they encounter some problems, they can’t treat that issue well and some students will result to seeking for attention through violence.

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We could solve the trouble with students’ bad behavior by parents’ proper educations. They should listen to their children more and set rules for them. If their children do wrong or rude actions, they should give punishment to them and If their kids are doing good activities, they would reward about that. Through this process they can learn difference between rights and wrongs therefore they will follow school’s rules and regulations more.

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We could solve the trouble with students’ bad behavior through parents' proper guidance. They should listen to their children more and set rules for them. It is recommended that parents will practice reward and punishment regarding their children's attitude. If their children will do wrong or will be rude, they give be punished at a certain level. Likewise, if their kids are being nice, they would be rewarded. Through this process they can learn the difference between right and wrong, therefore, they will follow school’s rules and regulations even more.

As well as this, teachers try to communicate more with their every student and they have to learn about how to handle problem children apart from teaching skills. When students feel they are in attention and concern, they will not make problems in order to attract teacher’s attention. Aside from that, though there is trouble with problem students, if teacher can solve the problem wisely as a mediator, students will respect teacher and problems are reduced.

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Furthermore, apart from focusing on their teaching skills, teachers should try to communicate more with every student and learn how to handle problem children. When students feel that they are given the proper concern, they will not make problems just to attract their teacher’s attention. Aside from that, though there is trouble with problem students, if teachers can solve the issue wisely as a mediator, students will respect them, thus, reducing the said problems

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To conclude, students’ bad behavior can be caused by the lack of proper home education and the lack of teachers’ concern and ability for handling problem students. We could tackle this issue by parents’ home training and when teacher try to pay attention to each students and improve their handling technique about students’ poor attitude, this issue can be reduced.  (수정 필요)

IELTS speaking part 1. When did you learn how to make handcrafted items?

When did you learn how to make handcrafted items?

When I was elementary school student, we had a class for making handmade items. I can remember that I made some dolls and potteries but I was not good at making those of things because I had a lot of sweat in my hands and also I didn’t have sense of making handcrafted items.

 

Would you like to learn more about other kinds of handicrafts in the future?

As I mention right before I’m not good at making some items by using my hands and I have no interest in doing this kinds of activities so I don’t want to learn more about that. I prefer to buy ready made products than handmade products because I think ready made products are more beautiful.

Do you think it is important for children to learn about this?

Yes, even though I don’t like to make handmade items but I believe it can be useful for children because doing this kinds of activities can help children improve their cognitive and motor skills.

 

Nowadays, when do you take public transportation?

Every day I take a bus and subway both because my work place is in Seoul within one hour away from my house and I don’t have a private car so I have to use public transportation. Even if I have a car, maybe I also usually take public transportation because Seoul has a heavy traffic.

IELTS speaking part 3. Do you think it is important to learn a foreign language?

Do you think it is important to learn a foreign language?

Yes. When we are good at speaking different language, If we go travelling, we won't need the help of a translator. We can basically communicate with the locals directly, thus, maximizing our experience with them. Aside from that we are able to understand various contents form foreign videos, books, movies, and the like. So I believe that can be beneficial especially for people who would like a diverse experience.

When should children start to learn a foreign language?

I think the recommended age for children to start learning a different language is under (the x) 7 years old. After 7 years old, they will go to elementary school and formally study to learn a foreign language as a subject. It could reduce children' interest in learning another language so I suppose that learning a foreign language naturally just by using conversation, before they are going to school, is more effective for children. And in that age, kids' brains are really sensitive to learn new language, so they can learn that easily than old people, aside from that, children's minds are more open to learning new languages.

Are there negative effects to very young children, aged 4 or 5 years old, when they try to learn a foreign language?

As I mentioned, learning a foreign language during very young ages, has good effects but negative effects also in there. In this ages, they don't know the reason that they should learn a different language so if parents give a pressure to them about learning that, it can stress them out and they can be confused between mother tongue and a foreign language because mother tongue also new language for them. So I suppose that it is really hard to make them learn a foreign language without having resistance.

Are there advantages in learning various languages?

As I mentioned, If we can address various language, we could have more diverse experience. We can conversation with the locals directly during travelling so I believe that we can more feel their own unique culture. Aside from travelling when it comes to situation searching for jobs, we can have a lot of job opportunities and we can have an edge from the other job applicants, we will be in demand because we can handle a wider scope of work then just normal people and may be our salary also will be higher. 

Are there advantages for children when they learn foreign languages other than English?

Of course yes. If they are enjoying and good at learning diverse languages, they will have  large advantages. Because in that age, naturally they have more ability to acquired a language so they can rapidly absorb new language than adults. If they can handle a lot of different languages, when they grow up, they can have a chance to go abroad as an exchange student and can travel another countries freely and also they can have more job opportunities. But if they have high stress about learning foreign languages, I suppose that they don't need to learn that by compulsion. I believe that they have another talent about something.